tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33595714.post2197825847798044290..comments2023-12-02T18:39:25.382+08:00Comments on 新春秋 PANDEMONIUM: 偶書Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33595714.post-61255485457801395322007-08-03T15:29:00.000+08:002007-08-03T15:29:00.000+08:00已字重複了三次!年、來二字也重複了。「南國遊來」後的十年不是短日子,何以「乍驚」?「世事」能變成「桑...已字重複了三次!年、來二字也重複了。「南國遊來」後的十年不是短日子,何以「乍驚」?「世事」能變成「桑田」嗎?<BR/><BR/>把詩改一改,會否更好?<BR/><BR/>南國遊子歸十載,舊時滄海竟桑田。<BR/>狂歌天下不平事,醉看凡間幾萬年。<BR/>覺悶鳳棲參眇法,得閒高臥把經揅。<BR/>攜笻載酒踏萍去,薄醉醒來句已全。<BR/><BR/>在下斗膽改詩,如有冒犯之處,萬勿見怪。路人癸https://www.blogger.com/profile/11990553067445506928noreply@blogger.com